Anyone willing to beta-read for my wife?

[sraun]

From her post here:

I have a short story (9,280 words) that is ready to send out to beta-readers.

Take two parts Wooster and Jeeves , one part ‘The Mouse That Roared’, and a dash of Inspector Clouseau. Pour into a spaceship and shake vigorously.

Anyone interested?

Comments

[coalboy.livejournal.com]

I'd love to!

Short story - Jasper

[iraunink.livejournal.com]

I'm looking for a mainly gentle and encouraging critique. I welcome notation of typos and incorrect punctuation. First reaction and general overview critique -
Do you like the characters?
Would you read more short stories about them?
Are there any places that have too much info/dialog/detail?
How is the pacing?

If the above is acceptable to you, please send an email to me with Jasper in the subject line. moc.reality@ytilaer.com